English 207 Writers in Cyberspace

Thanks for a great semester!!

2007-11-28T12:06:00.000-05:00

Thanks, everyone, for contributing to this class blog and making it useful for our class discussions--I hope you learned something by reading and responding to your peers in this digital space. Thanks again for a good semester and best of luck on your finals!

--ejfleitz

Final Project

2007-11-26T09:12:00.000-05:00

I would like to use non verbal communication as a focus for my presentation which would relate essay 3 and 4 and then use essay 5 to show the connection between 3 and 4. I think that a video clip that demonstrates the power of NVC would be interesting and demonstrate why NVC is so important in communication. I think these 3 essays (345) would be most interesting to revise and relate the most to one another.

Brainstorm

2007-11-26T09:10:00.000-05:00

For the portfolio, I plan on using project #1 because I really enjoyed writing the narrative and it really made me think about how language is important and the role that it plays for others who struggle with it. I am also planning on using project #3 because it made me realize a lot of different things about how my career speaks and writes. This project was a big eye opener because I never really thought about how it has it's own language until that project. The final project that I plan on using for the portfolio would be my last project #5. I want to use this project because it is basically what this class was about to me, learning how to write as a part of your future career's discourse community which is an important thing to know.

Portfolio

2007-11-26T09:09:00.000-05:00

I have 3 papers that look specifically at my career field, and those are gonna be the ones that I choose for my portfolio. I believe that they have been the most consistent in terms of information and they all relate in a way to each other. Also I found them to be the most enjoyable to do, due to the fact that it was on an interest of mine.

For the Portfolio I would like to include:

2007-11-26T09:07:00.001-05:00

(1) Essay # 3 because I feel like i really enjoyed my discourse community
(2) Essay # 4 because my wikipedia entry was a build of essay #3, of which I put a great deal of thought into
(3) Essay # 5 because it is the final project and I am enjoying it and the progress i've made so far

Ideas for Final

2007-11-26T09:07:00.000-05:00

I am thinking that I want to revise my wiki entry, my paper on my discourse community, and I cant really at this point decide the last one that I want to revise. My first essay was thinking about just becasue I enjoyed that one the most but I'm not sure if it need to be revised. It something that I am going to have to think about.

course portifolo brainstorm

2007-11-26T09:06:00.006-05:00

For the three projects that we have to put on a CD as of now i am thinking i will use project #2 the powerpoint with the group, our group worked well together and our powerpoint was well put together. I am also going to use the wikipedia entry, that was one of my best projects. and possibly the last project#5. I might revise project #3 and use that but i am not sure yet, if my #5 goes well i will use that insdead and since i will be going in a different direction that first planned with #5 I think this project will go well.

Portfolio overview

2007-11-26T09:06:00.005-05:00

My three best essays were the Expliotory Research Essay & Annotated Bibliography, Wikipedia Contribution, and the Personal Discourse Analysis. These three essays were chosen because they have helped me understand how to write efficiently and effectively based upon there high grades. By receiving these grades I felt that I have mastered on developing a techinique on how to write about the situation, rather than how I felt about the situation. I feel that this technique is very helpful because in any business you need to write about the business with full resources with evidence to support your case. If you master this technique can be considered a major asset to the business world.

portfolio brainstorming

2007-11-26T09:06:00.004-05:00

1. Essay2: Personal Discourse Analysis
2. Essay3: Expository Research Essay + Annotated Bibliography
3. Essay4: Wikipedia Contribution

These are what will be included in my portfolio. I chose essay2 because I enjoyed the project and recieved a good grade. I felt that I understood this project well. I chose essay3 because it contains two things; research essay and annotated bib. This project kills two birds with one stone. It shows more of my work in one project. Having a wide variety of material included on the CD is better than few writings. Finally, I chose essay4 because it was a challenge at first, but in the end came out better than expected. I recieved a good grade on it and understood it completely, towards the end. I've never created an entry and want it to be a part of my portfolio.

Portfolio Ideas

2007-11-26T09:06:00.003-05:00

I think for certain I want to add my final project into my portfolio because it shows most what I think I tried to explain in my past 2 essays which is PR being a form of promoting a product. I've created original digital images in Photoshop and also plan to have a PowerPoint for my final presentation so I actually get to show what I plan to do in my career field instead of simply saying. I always think a visual is better than having someone tell you or just by reading about it anyway which is why I wanted to create an image for this final project.

I'll probably put the first essay in my portfolio since it was a bit more personal for me. As for the last essay that I will include...I'm not sure just yet.

Portfolio Project

2007-11-26T09:06:00.002-05:00

In preparation for the final portfolio project I have decided that I will most likely be burning projects #3-#5 onto a CD to turn in at the end of the semester. I have decided to use these three because they are very similiar in content and relativity and I feel they will make the final portfolio appropriate and sensible to the purpose and content of the assignment. I feel that these three would be my strongest and most significant assignments and will be useful to the purpose of the assignment.

2007-11-26T09:06:00.001-05:00

For the final portfolio I am planning to include project #1, project #2, and project #3. I chose these projects because I think they best reflect my different writing abilities. Project #1 provides an example of my ability to write creatively. Project #2 shows how I am able to put together a power point and a presentation to communicate my ideas. Project #3 is an example of how I can write professionally. I think the previously listed projects are the best combination to show the different skills that I have learned in English 207.

2007-11-19T08:49:00.001-05:00

As of now,
I have a powerpoint and part of a video completed to explain choreography and what makes up good choreography. Also, I have examples of underdeveloped choreography where the story does not make sense and the non-verbal communication messages are mixed.

final project progress

2007-11-19T08:48:00.000-05:00

well actually i am still on the brainstorming phase of my work. after consulting with you yesterday i finally have an idea as to what i can do my project on. tonight and tomorrow i should have a rough draft ready.

Final Project

2007-11-19T08:46:00.001-05:00

I am just getting started on my final project. I was set back a little by the game in Buffalo this week. I have a good idea of what I want to do it on. I am currently going thru all of my sources that I have found.
I will definitely need to meet with you next week, because I feel like I am behind the rest of the class. I am not exactly sure how to go about this final project. A little extra guidance would help me greatly.

self evaluation

2007-11-19T08:35:00.000-05:00

As of now, I have my pamphlet completed. I am sure that it will need to be brushed up once you get done looking over it. I also still need to write a 3 page paper on what I did and why. I am not exactly sure what I need to include in it. I also need to put a power point together about my pamphlet.

Mall Evaluation

2007-11-19T08:34:00.001-05:00

I feel that I am half way through my final project. I feel that I just need to add a couple material from my sources and I am done. I feel that the one thing that won't be done until the last minute is the hands-on approach teaching method for the class because I have to do it rather than study for it for the most part. The only question that I have is when are your office hours for next week?

Project #5 Self-Evaluation

2007-11-19T08:33:00.001-05:00

My progress at this point in working with project #5 is going well but, I still have yet to improve my rhetoric and choice of language to use for my presentation which is in about two weeks. I finished the rough draft and I am pretty confident and decided on the sources that I am using for my presentation. I am planning to use a speech format for the presentation which will be presented as though it is a public address or speech which I am planning to shape into a persuasive address that concerns the importance and relevance of public address and speech as it relates and applies to different career fields. I will probably have some questions and more ideas to bring up as the final project comes closer.

Self Evaluation

2007-11-19T08:33:00.000-05:00

My project currently, like most of my projects is different from what i had originally anticipated. I had originally intended on presenting the trends of presidential elections, however, it is mention but no longer my main focus. I have focused more so on how to speech effectively.

I feel I am making progress with my project number 5. I think it is coming together but needs more work. I dont have very many ideas for improvements but I am sure that after recieveing my rough draft I will be able to polish it to fit the goals of this project.

Evaluation

2007-11-19T08:32:00.000-05:00

I feel like I have a good sense of where I'm going in this project. I think that my project still needs some work. My advertisement needs more pictures or just a better picture to get peoples attention in general. I need to make it more flashy I think. Also I need to think of maybe a better mission statement. I don't know if I like the one I have.
Questions I have:
On my poster board that I am going to do; how big does the poster board have to be?
When we present am I persuading the class as if they were my target audience?
How does our presentation have to be?

Self-Evaluation: Final Project

2007-11-19T08:21:00.001-05:00

Write a 1-2 paragraph evaluation about where your final project is as of today. If you have any questions, ask them here.

--ejfleitz

Project Cinco...

2007-11-16T08:58:00.001-05:00

I plan on doing a case briefing for the last project of the semester. I will present it like a lawyer would to a courtroom. It is possible that I may even do a current case that has not been decided yet and make my own ruling on it. I could pick a current topic like the OJ Simpson case (the new one). Everyone loves OJ! I am still thinking about other ideas at this point but am getting closer to the final decision on a presentation median.

2007-11-16T08:58:00.000-05:00

I am going to use a power point presentation for my final project. This type of presentation is used in the business field a lot and would be appropriate for me to use as well. I am not sure exactly how I am going to use it, but I know that it will play a key role.

Final Presentation

2007-11-16T08:56:00.002-05:00

I will be discussing about how the economy from specific areas will affect the Malls. I will give examples of how malls became struggling and deceased malls. Most of my presentation will consist of slides, however before I start talking about malls I will show the audience a picture that I painted in my Junior year in highschool that's called a "Tribute to North Towne". I ask the audience to go to Wikipedia because I will give some my refrence from my presentation from some of the logs that have been summitted. I intend to have this as the funnest presenation by having all of my audience participate. I garuantee that if some one has a comment or question it will certainly be answered. Unlike other presentations in this class I intend this presentation to be built by the audience, and not from the usual right and present. (This doesn't mean that I will not put forth my full effort for writing this project) However if no one participates I will have a backup plan for presenting as a monotone if necessary. Hopefully it will not come to that. Please post any comments if you have any concerns about this issue and I will be happy to respond to you.

Presentation idea/brainstorm

2007-11-16T08:56:00.001-05:00

For my final project presentation, i am planning to use power point with both pictures and words on the slides. I am not sure what exactly the slides will contain, but i am thinking that each will break down my project #5 but in a more visual way to get the audience interested.

Presentation

2007-11-16T08:56:00.000-05:00

In reviewing and brainstorming for my final presentation for project #5 I am leaning on a public address and speech format but, am still unsure of whether or not to use any technology resources or not. I am debating about possibly using a powerpoint application in addition to my speech presentation because I feel that it may reinforce and make the presentation stronger. I am hoping to make this presentation as dynamic and appropriate as I can using whatever resources an methods are available.

presentation

2007-11-16T08:55:00.005-05:00

I plan to do a powerpoint presentation, mabe a side from youtube. I would like to present the class with my political journal and introduce rhetoric trends in past and current presidential elections.

Project thoughts

2007-11-16T08:55:00.004-05:00

Some final thoughts for the final presentation are possibly a power point, or if accessable I would try to find a brief summarized report of the field electronically. The goal would be to make a step by step manual of the specifics and what it would take to be successful in this business.

Presentation

2007-11-16T08:55:00.003-05:00

I have no idea what I am going to do for my presentation but I am leaning towards technology to help me present it, I just don't know how I am going to do it. My project # 5 is a lesson plan for a high school English class to write a career research paper. I just don't think there is much to present on that that is interesting.

Presentation Plans

2007-11-16T08:55:00.002-05:00

1. PowerPoint Presentation
+Video clip of teacher in classroom

2. Teach a lesson
+ Create lesson plan
+ Pass out handout of homework (math worksheet)

3. Speech
+Handout...
+Video clip...

These are the ways of presenting that I am considering. I am not sure if 2 is acceptable, but that is the one I am leaning more towards. If 2 isn't acceptable, I will do 1. Number 3 would be my last choice. I don't like to stand in front of people and just talk.

Presentation Idea

2007-11-16T08:55:00.001-05:00

For my presentation, I will be using visual aides. As of now, I will be creating 3 original 'ads' and then also creating 3 more images (ie: ad1 in a magazine, ad2 on a billboard, etc.) to portray those 'ads'. I will then use a PowerPoint presentation to go through each of these images to explain what about them relates to the form of public relations and promotions. I might be able to pull a video clip (not made by me) that would go along with the concept of my class project but I'm not sure yet if one will be available by my presentation date.

self evaluation

2007-11-13T22:19:00.000-05:00

The reason that I made the wiki entry the way that I did was because I felt it was more informative, and helped walk the readers through the process that I chose to use. I hope the example that I used was understandable as well as fitting the discourse of my major field.

self-evaluation

2007-11-07T09:03:00.000-05:00

I edited the wiki entry the way I did to give it more substance. I wanted to put in quotes from important literary figures like Mark Twain to expand the entry of language arts. I also wanted to look at this term from a teaching perspective.

self-evaluation

2007-11-07T08:58:00.000-05:00

i edited and created this wiki entry the way i did because the previous post did not go into much detail about the working conditions as well as education requirements for people who are interested in insurance claims. i find the claims adjuster career interesting and exciting and i hope that i was able to express that in my editing of the wiki.

Self Evaluation

2007-11-07T08:49:00.001-05:00

I created the entry that I did because I felt there was a need for people to know who Romona Robinson was. I saw that there was not an entry for this particular news caster. I still am having issues with getting it approved but I do have the entry done. She was a newscaster that did many significant things and won many awards so therefore I had plenty of information to put inside of the entry.

self evaluation

2007-11-07T08:46:00.000-05:00

I edited the wikipedia page Teaching Methods. I wanted to edit this page because it was in dire need of help. It lacked information and citations. I edited in the way that I did because it was factual, helpful, and informative. The site barely had any information at all. It was like I created the page instead of only editing it.

Wikipedia Post

2007-11-07T08:45:00.001-05:00

The reason I edited the Wikipedia page for Public Relations the way I did was easy: I wanted to keep things simple and straight to the point. The original document I had written up contained, after reading it again, more of my personal opinions about things and scenarios which probably shouldn't be included since people are seeking facts on the website and not opinions. Even though I thought I edited with decent, factual information...someone re-edited in the wee hours of the morning and deleted my information.

Wikipedia Self-Evaluation

2007-11-07T08:44:00.003-05:00

I edited the Event planning entry on wikipedia because this is the particular career that i hope to have one day. The page did not have much but a paragraph on wikipedia so i expanded the page by adding details on how to break into the business, steps to event planning, working conditions, and networking. I created it in a way where first people could learn a little abou the event planning career then give more details as to what one should need in order to be an event planner. i think my edit was succussful because it is easy to read and pretty straight forward and has factual information about the business.

Wikipedia addition: Legal English

2007-11-07T08:44:00.002-05:00

I decided to add a section called "Style Explanation" to the wikipedia topic "Legal English." I did this for a few reasons. First, the individual that made the page origionally did not talk about the style of language people use in the legal community. They mostly talked about the history and specific grammatical issues. I believe that style is important when analyzing a discourse community. Secondly, most importantly, it is necessary to explain why the legal community communicates the way they do. It is nice to point how lawyers and judges differ from the rest of the community when it comes to language. It is even more important to explain why there exists a difference from the rest of the community.

Self-Evaluation

2007-11-07T08:44:00.001-05:00

The reasons for why I chose to edit the wiki entry the way I did was because I wanted to use the closest form of language to the wiki style that was reflected in the entry that I had edited. The style was loose and informative and I carefully imitated this style the best I could for this. I chose to edit the Public Speaking entry because it pertains to my career interest and is relevant to my major. I also felt that there was very little information about public speaking on the wiki entry and it was easier to edit for that page. I felt that the entry itself needed improvement and I am confident that my contribution was helpful.

Self Evaluation Post

2007-11-07T08:44:00.000-05:00

I edited the North Towne Square Mall entry because I found it quite difficult to put up a new entry. Mainly because it took too long to approve and it was constantly being denied. I found that while editing North Towne Square mall, I learned the painful financial history that it went through during the years, and what the people planning on doing it with its property. In my opinion I though I did very good on discribing the history on North Towne Square mall.

This pertained to my last paper by describing how accounting can financially predict the death on the business. The main thesis of this report was that economically numbers made from the society can either create or destroy a business based upon how much they decide to purchase.
My original main goal for my last paper that I tried to do was describe the different areas in the business world so that the people who are try to get sucessful jobs can see where there going. This report teaches people what a unsuccessful business looks like, and advises them when to close their shop when necessary.

self evaluation

2007-11-07T08:43:00.000-05:00

I chose to create the wikipedia page that I did because it was one that I thought would be useful to many people. I would have utilized the page early in the year for one of my classes, had it been created. I chose to make it look like the other supreme court cases that were posted on wikipedia. This would allow people to be able to go from page to page and know what to expect. Many of the people who will use my Wikipedia page will be trying to brief the case. I created the page to flow like a case brief so that it would be very helpful.

Self-Eval

2007-11-07T08:39:00.000-05:00

I edited the wikipedia entry I did because it was something that tied to my career field and I had previously done research on it. I found a section on the web page that pertained to achievement gap strategies and saw that it lacked strategies that teachers can use to help close the achievement gap. I already had information on more strategies to use to I decided to expand the entry that was already there with what I had done research on previously.

Self-Evaluation

2007-11-07T08:38:00.000-05:00

I wanted to say first and really quick that when I started this assignment I wasn't really sure about what I was doing and getting frustrated because I didn't think I would have anything to contribute. Now that I finished my paper and posted it to the Wikipedia I feel pretty excited that I got to contribute to someone else who wants to learn about Insulin Pumps. I posted the listing insulin pump under the term Intensive Insulinotherapy. The insulin pump is a treatment device used in this Intensive Insulintherapy. I thought that it tied in well with the rest of the Wiki entry that I added on to. I also posted my entry at the end so that people can first learn about he treatment then learn about the device.

revision

2007-10-31T08:39:00.000-04:00

At this moment I am thinking about additional things to add to my wikipedia page to better enhance it. Still trying to focus exactly what I am trying to say.

2nd Wednesday post

2007-10-31T08:37:00.003-04:00

I still need to submit to you my rough draft, so I have no feedback from you. The peer workshop only helped some because I was confused of what to do for the project. I got help and a little more understanding of the project as a whole. The discussion for my entries page lacks information and conversation. One person states on the discussion that "this page needs help". I agree with this user and hopefully I can do so. My edit will be on the entry of Teaching Methods.

Revision Plans

2007-10-31T08:37:00.002-04:00

I plan on revising my paper to fit the format of wikipedia and less academic. I feel that although I have done much research, I need to apply it to my cite. Also I need to decide what will go on which part(s) of the wiki, such as history, discussion, etc. and how i want to present it and what i feel the audience needs most.

Wednesday post

2007-10-31T08:37:00.001-04:00

The entry is short as of now. It can be edited with the addition of facts and information. Reading through the history and discussion, others too agree that there needs more information. One person stated that the page needs “help”. The lack of already present information doesn’t help me with revisions on draft 4.

Revision Plan

2007-10-31T08:36:00.000-04:00

In my next draft I am going to expand with even more research. My first draft seemed slightly limited in the sense of researched information. Also I am going to put more current trends in it. With a little more detail and more specific elpanations I believe I will have a great paper.

Revision Plans

2007-10-31T08:35:00.002-04:00

After looking at my rough draft and deciding what to do to improve the revision of this project, the main thing that I will change for this essay will definitely be giving more specific details and citing sources that I take my information from. I feel after I do this the wikipedia revision will be easier to edit and make more sense when read. I am also going to doublecheck on citations and specificity the most with this assignment.

Revisions

2007-10-31T08:35:00.001-04:00

I'm unsure about changes, considering I wasn't here, nor did I submit my rough draft electronically for critiquing. So as far as I'm concerned, I'll be talking to Elizabeth (and probably my neighbor, who just loves to have ideas bounced off of her) to figure out what my next moves will be entailing.

2nd response for Wed.

2007-10-31T08:35:00.000-04:00

To revise my draft i think i just need to work on making sure my sources are cited right. it seems that is a big aspect of whether the post will stay up on wikipedia or not. I am also going to focus my entry a bit more with more detail into the field. Also the usual grammar aspect i will look over also.

Revision Plans

2007-10-31T08:34:00.000-04:00

after reading your comments, I plan to go into a little more detail about certain parts of my post. I wrote the post assuming that the readers would know little details about the case. I plan to incorporate more information so that someone will be able to look at the post and understand it without any prior knowledge. I also need to format the headings that I include to look like other cases that are already posted.

Revision Plans

2007-10-31T08:33:00.001-04:00

I plan to make the usual grammar and spelling revisions along with trying to put some more length into my essay. I have a lot of work to do on my essay and I'm hoping that I will be able to post it on Wikiapedia. I also need to work on the choice of wording that is used in the essay. since Wiki likes everything to be straight forward I need to revise my word choice.

Today's 2nd Response

2007-10-31T08:33:00.000-04:00

I am still unsure of how I will revise my paper. The only thing I can say is I will try to make it more Wikipedia friendly. I think, for the most part, the essay is formatted correctly, I just have to make sure that it is more to the point like Wikipedia posts tend to be.

essay #4

2007-10-31T08:32:00.000-04:00

After recieving feedback from you I have a few revision changes that I need to make in order for essay #4 to be complete. I need to work on the organization part alot in my essay and add my sources to it to back up my claims. I plan on revising it again this week, then hopefully get more feedback from you and turn it in wednesday for the final. Other than that, I just need to sit down and do it.

Response

2007-10-31T08:31:00.000-04:00

This is for today's response for Mon. After looking at my page, I learned that it really focuses on examples of public relations but doesn't really go into extreme detail about exactly what it is.

Wednesday Response

2007-10-31T08:27:00.000-04:00

After researching the wikipedia page on public speaking, I found that there was not very much that I could do to edit the "discussion" page. However the history and other sections had plenty of space that could have text added into it. Researching this and the other bibliography page I have was helpful in my decisions to edit those pages.

Revision Plans

2007-10-31T08:20:00.000-04:00

After getting feedback from a peer and me, and looking at the discussion page on Wikipedia, summarize your plans for revision for your Essay #4.

--ejfleitz

the history

2007-10-31T07:25:00.000-04:00

I didnt learn much in my history section on political discourse because there wasnt much there. I feel that I need to expand on the history on my cite. The discussion portion of my cite was more explanatiory, however, it can also be expanded.

Wednesday's Response

2007-10-30T23:12:00.000-04:00

I feel that I learned alot from my peers (whether if they were in my group or online). As I reviewed the posts online I felt that there were some that were too brief that needed some editing, and others that had really good amplified language in discribing the definition to the public. Even though some people feel that it's easier to add than to create a new blog, I feel that you are being inventing than learning about the material just like what we reviewed on Monday. Another thing to consider is that by Adding new terms to the blog you are further educating the world on how the world operates, but with new additions to old terms you are not really educating the world. The reason is because more people are more likely to know about old term and how they work (even if the analysis are posted or not), where as new terms are more likely to help society in there future career goals. I feel that by reviewing my Essay #4 with you, I will get even more closer to where I want to be for my report.

Oct/30/2007

2007-10-30T22:06:00.000-04:00

I learned a lot by reading up on outside websites that had information on it about insuln pump thearpy. This has helped me to revise my essay more. Insulin pump therapy is more of a treatment for diabetes to children, young persons and adults. The more you know the better you can write your essay. I would recommend using as many outside sources as possible.

Wednesday Wikipedia Post

2007-10-30T21:47:00.001-04:00

Although I am not editing an existing page, I did look at page that is comparable to what I will post. From the history, I learned that it is very important that I create headings to divide up the information on the page. I also found out that it is very important to fully explain all aspects of the court case that I post. A lot of people who get onto Wikipedia are unaware of the details that go into certain cases. I need to make my post clear so that anyone can read it and understand what was said.

wikipeida search on event planning

2007-10-30T21:31:00.001-04:00

I went to the "talk" page for event planning and i found that a few other people posted and have been looking for information on how event planning started. I havent found much research on that but i think i will try to look harder for some. One person mentioned using software as a section, but another person responded how that is not unversal for everyone and that is not what event planning is about, it is about communcation and actual planning of the event. I think that i will not focus on the software aspect of it, but in the entry i will focus more on the aspect of planning event and skills that one would need to be in this profession. There was not much on the talk page so i think i will go mostly from what research i have found and what seems to be important in the event planning career field.

Wednesday-Wikipedia

2007-10-30T19:58:00.000-04:00

When searching my history and discussion page on wikipedia I noted several findings about the achievement gap. My Article was first dated back to October 2004 and last edited October 18, 2007. Something that I found interesting on the discussion page was the main person who created this entry wants to create a debate with both sides of the argument on whether anything is being done to close the achievement gap. This person believes that some have no interest to close the gap while others do. In my essay #4, I came up with strategies that people can use to close the gap and in my findings everyone was discussing how important it is to close the gap. I think that I can help to contribute to this entry by giving the side of how to close the gap/why it's important to do so.

Response for Wednesday: Wikipedia

2007-10-29T09:49:00.001-04:00

After searching on Wikipedia for your entry's discussion and history pages, report back to this blog about what you learned. Summarize the kinds of things the discussion talked about (what are people suggesting to be edited with the entry?), and discuss how/if reading the discussion and history pages helped you revise or focus your Essay #4 draft.

--ejfleitz

peer feedback

2007-10-29T09:17:00.000-04:00

By talking with you, Michelle and I are more clear about the direction of this assingment. I have more work to complete, but I think the best route is to edit an existing topic, rather than starting a new one.

Peer Feedback

2007-10-29T09:16:00.001-04:00

There was a lot of confusion for me on this essay so I didn't recieve a lot of feedback, but did recieve help and clarification for the project.

Feedback for Essay 4

2007-10-29T09:16:00.000-04:00

The feedback that I received for this paper was helpful and especially was useful for me in expanding more on what I could add and finish for the final draft. The peer evaluation of my paper was good for helping me pinpoint what I needed to change and have edited for the final draft.

Peer Feedback

2007-10-29T09:06:00.001-04:00

It was good getting the feedback from my peers on essay 4. I need to add how the legal community uses latin in their speech and writing as well as the other things I have already mentioned.

In class peer workshop

2007-10-29T09:05:00.000-04:00

Having a class member review my work helped to reveal the weak areas of my paper. I know that I need to expand on certain aspect to make my post clear to people who are not familiar with the topic.

How helpful was this?

2007-10-29T09:04:00.000-04:00

Somewhat helpful

Progress on essay 4

2007-10-29T08:42:00.001-04:00

Project 4 is a bit confusing to me. I have never posted or edited to wikipedia before. I was cruising around the site and it still seems blurry of how to post to it. The information that I have collected from essay 3 and further research is coming along well though. My rough draft is short and sketchy. It needs a lot of work, but I think after the peer workshop I'll have a better handle on things... hopefully.

Progress Essay #4

2007-10-29T08:42:00.000-04:00

Essay #4 is coming along well; I found it difficult to narrow down a subject within my field that I am interested in writing about, but I have a good start and my ideas are starting to come together. I am going to be focusing on the study of the role of non-verbal language within my discourse community. Wikipedia already has an entry for non-verbal communication, which has allowed me a starting point for analysis. I am trying to expand on the definition of non-verbal communication and to include its study in my discourse community.

2007-10-29T08:39:00.000-04:00

I feel lost on this assignment. I am not sure I am on track with what you are looking for. It was very hard to find topics on wikipedia that are not already covered, so I expanded on the dance competition entry to add dance conventions and workshops. I found it very difficult to find sources for this information. Most of the knowledge is either common knowledge or not cited anywhere. I know I need to come up with more cited information from accurate sources.

progress

2007-10-29T08:38:00.002-04:00

I feel that this assignment is almost impossible. There is nothing that I can bring to Wiki that is new to the table. I did my essay on an insulin pump specialist. Then there is the fact that I don't know how long to make my essay. If i make it longer than one page then its repetitive and boring. So I guess that I'm not really that happy with my progress so far.

Self Evaluation

2007-10-29T08:38:00.001-04:00

I feel that I am doing okey for this project. However I am having a hard time with wikipedia convincing them that I am not plagerising. I know technically I am not because I am giving reference to the site when I post my draft. I would like to discuss about this further during the office hours.

Progress on Essay #4

2007-10-29T08:36:00.000-04:00

I have been finding information and preparing for the final draft right now. I had some difficulties getting the rough draft started with what to add into he entries. I chose to edit a page rather than create my own page. The references and sources I have considered using are sources that I used for essay #3 which are relevant to what I am writing for the final draft.

progress

2007-10-29T08:35:00.004-04:00

I dont feel like im truely entering my discourse community but someone who is studying. Ive learned much and look forward to learning more. This assignment has been fine so far, it is challenging, however, to convert to an academic style other than the "standard essay"

Progress for Essay #4 Draft

2007-10-29T08:35:00.001-04:00

I feel that i have a good start to essay #4 i feel as though i could re word my sentences a little bit and add in some more information. i think your feedback always helps, i know there are some things i can change and work on a bit more before i submit it to wikipedia.

Friday's Post

2007-10-29T08:32:00.002-04:00

When Bartholomae says to "invent the university" I believe he is stating that a student creates their own experiences throughout their college career. Students may or may not use sources (library, professors, study centers, or other students) to make their experiences the best. How ever they go about inventing the university, everyone's is different. It is a possibility that students in the same major may have close to the same experiences, but nothing is ever exact.
He uses the word invent rather than learn because you learn from mistakes and he doesn't want the experiences of a univeristy to be exactly a learning experience, although it is he wants it to be created and to the best of your ability. Student inventing is learning the knowledge (past, present, and future) of your discourse community.

Essay 4

2007-10-29T08:32:00.001-04:00

I think that my paper is off to a good start on essay 4. Since I am making a brand new wikipedia entry, it may be a little too brief. I tried to focus on bringing the summarized points from essay 3 into this paper. I might want to bring in some more sourcing to better elaborate. I enjoy my topic and am learning a lot about it. It will be good to have some feedback to see if I am pointed in the right direction on this project.

2007-10-29T08:32:00.000-04:00

Things are going good so far. I think I have a goo start on project #4. I know I still need to brush it up a little before I post it on Wikipedia, but I think I am on the right track. Your feedback always helps, so I will make the corrections that you suggest.

Invent the University

2007-10-26T08:34:00.000-04:00

I feel invent the university means to recreate the university to fit to yourself. My invention of the University is going to be different from everyone elses invention of the University. It is a composition of experiences that help to form your idea's of success and the means you use to get you there. He uses the word invent because in a sense you are the creater of the experieces you encounter.

Firday post

2007-10-26T08:29:00.000-04:00

When the article dicusses "inventing the university," I think the author means that one has to be creative and invent different ways of functioning in the new discourse community. When one first enters the university setting he or she does not know all the proper ways of interacting. A person must "invent" ways of being a part of the community until he or she learns how to do so.

Invent the University

2007-10-26T08:27:00.000-04:00

I think "invent the university" means that you need to learn the system of the university. You need to be able to figure out how to use the academic setting and apply it to your future career and goals. By "inventing the university," you learn to take advantage of the help of teachers, alumnai, fellow students, etc. and notice other opportunities to advance and network within your career field.

Bartholomae Response

2007-10-26T07:19:00.000-04:00

The Bartholomae essay for class is an essay that talks about "inventing the university". What this means I believe is that university students upon entering a type of "discourse community", they manage to make their way through this community by picking up what they learn and going along using observations and thus the student sort of "creates" their environment or language in a particular situation. This seems to be common with students that are unfamiliar to a new area of study and its discourse community.

Inventing the University

2007-10-25T23:36:00.000-04:00

I think that what Bartholomae means by using the phrase "invent the university" is a term that a lot of people can find themselves doing at college or in their life. I think it means that even though you may not be particularly apart of a certain discourse or know what something means is that you need to "invent" ways to get yourself through that particular task, such as writing a simple paper for english when you may be a math major. You may not always know what every assignment means, but you make it through it by breaking it into steps that allow you to learn as you go along to complete the task.

Bartholomae Reading

2007-10-25T22:27:00.000-04:00

When Bartholomae says to "invent the university" he means that the student needs to move into the world of the university step by step using different ways of thinking, arguing and establishing authority. The student needs to take on the role of the authority that they are going to be. He means that the student has to apply what they are learing and have learned and be able to use it in their working and everyday lives when they are done with college. the student is inventing their future with using all the different and complicated ways of thinking and aruging in a college setting. The student must take ideas and push theselves to think as an expert is thinking, the student is inventing their future and what their lives will later be like.

fridays response

2007-10-25T21:09:00.001-04:00

David Bartholomae's quote "invent the university" means that you use what you learned at college in your real life. You are going to be in the real working world and when you are there in order to make a different you need to invent ideas and thoughts and then incorporate them into your everyday working life. Youre not learning something you are thinking of something or Inventing"something! This is a competative world.

Friday's response

2007-10-24T18:37:00.000-04:00

David Bartholomae's quote "invent the university" means that you apply the terminology and presentation skills that you learned in the university, into new ways of thinking in your everyday life in order for you to get to you where you want to go in life. This is hard for me because in my department of studies, (excluding entrepreneurship) you "learn" more than you "invent". Even though you learn new material like "Business Angel" and "Boolean" the exams that are given to you by the professors don't like being creative and prefer having the "right" statement due to their discourse community.

The student is inventing a new way how to perceive clay. In the students case he transformed the general geographic model of earth into the amplified geographic model of earth by specifically studying the whole area of the earth. David Bartholomae taught us that you do not have to be "God" to come up with something new, you just have to rethink the question and support it with new material that you have learned. In my concurrence on this issue, I have a better understanding of my education by challenging my "wrong" answer and explaining why its right by "inventing" like what the student did, as opposed to "learning" like what the average basic professor politely snubbing you based upon what the "book" said.

The reason why he uses the word "invent," rather than "learn" is because he is taking the readers to another level in the College education field. I understand from what David Bartholomae saying in general is that anyone can "learn", but only the true geniuses in the world know how to take what they have "learned" and "invent" something new. Historically the people who "invent" are honored and remembered academically not by their own knowledge, but by how their "inventions" affected and helped the societies way of thinking and operating. Historically we call these people "inventors", but today we refer to these people something else which are "entreprenuers". You don't need to be in business to rethink your new ideas, you can also be in law as well. The reason why so many cases and laws are changed is because of how people percieve the law for that case and test the constitution to see if its qualified to really be a law by "inventing" rather than abiding by them like "learning".

In my project I plan to "invent" from the materials of Wikipedia, a new page for Edward Jones Company as opposed to supporting and "learn" from the materials on Wikipedia existing page. I feel that this is beneficial to me because someday I want to start my own business with a help of some loan officers so that I can truely be a honorable employer, as opposed to average employee in the business world. I feel that the more that I do and complete projects by myself the better off I will be in the long run because it will teach me the discipline of handling personal situations when they arise.

Response for Friday: Inventing the University

2007-10-24T14:53:00.000-04:00

What does it mean, as Bartholomae says, to "invent the university"? Why does he use the word "invent," rather than "learn"? What, exactly, is the student inventing?

--ejfleitz

project status

2007-10-19T08:49:00.000-04:00

I feel like I am on a good pace with my paper. I think that the research that I put in to my project is really helping me out. There was a good portion of this information that I was aware of. With what I had already known, the most recent information that I will use has some interesting facts on insurance sales and the main points staying consistant. I honestly feel like I am on a good pace to be ready to earn a good grade.

Paper #3 Progress

2007-10-19T08:45:00.001-04:00

I have read all the teacher comments on my first rough draft, and trasfered the correction to my paper. I have written a full rough draft and am currently doing another peer evaluation. I plan on finishing my final draft this week, tho there is still some things I want to research and maybe change or add to my paper.

Progress On 3

2007-10-19T08:45:00.000-04:00

I am working on my paper for monday, I need to restructure my paper so that it will focus more so on the how my discourse works and not so much on the what. Also I have attempted to work on my annotated bibliography but my efforts have not been promising. This assignment has proved to be a challenging one, interesting but putting it all together is different

Progess

2007-10-19T08:39:00.000-04:00

I have made good progress since my rough draft. I really started to add quotes from people already involved in the law field to back up my observations on the language of law. I focused on the elaboration of each idea and explaining why people in my field communicate the way they do. I need to gather at least 2 more sources to fit the requirment for the bibliography. This paper has proved to be challenging since I am still very far away from being a true member of this discourse community.

#3

2007-10-19T08:37:00.001-04:00

I've looked over the comments made about my rough draft and need to fix my paper's structrure. I need to also stop focusing on what teachers teach and more look at how they discourse.

2007-10-19T08:37:00.000-04:00

I am working on correcting the things that you suggested for project number 3. I am in the middle of my bibliography. I still need to go back and revise my paper once more before I turn it in.

Progress on Paper #3

2007-10-19T08:34:00.001-04:00

So far, I have reviewed your comments on my rough draft and have begun to re-arrange some elements of my paper. I am almost finished, but could use to go back and add some connecting sentences between sources and my personal information.

Progress on Project #3

2007-10-19T08:34:00.000-04:00

As of the moment I am currently in the process of finishing my final draft for project 3 which will be turned in on Monday. I have been utilizing websites and some other book sources for citation and the annotated bibliography. So far the essay's rough draft has been completed and criticized and ready for editing. The sources that I have chosen to use for this essay relate to subject matter that pertains to my chosen career field and have been cited appropriately in the essay. Overall the progress of my essay has been completing the rough draft and preparing for the final essay.