revision

At this moment I am thinking about additional things to add to my wikipedia page to better enhance it. Still trying to focus exactly what I am trying to say.

2nd Wednesday post

I still need to submit to you my rough draft, so I have no feedback from you. The peer workshop only helped some because I was confused of what to do for the project. I got help and a little more understanding of the project as a whole. The discussion for my entries page lacks information and conversation. One person states on the discussion that "this page needs help". I agree with this user and hopefully I can do so. My edit will be on the entry of Teaching Methods.

Revision Plans

I plan on revising my paper to fit the format of wikipedia and less academic. I feel that although I have done much research, I need to apply it to my cite. Also I need to decide what will go on which part(s) of the wiki, such as history, discussion, etc. and how i want to present it and what i feel the audience needs most.

Wednesday post

The entry is short as of now. It can be edited with the addition of facts and information. Reading through the history and discussion, others too agree that there needs more information. One person stated that the page needs “help”. The lack of already present information doesn’t help me with revisions on draft 4.

Revision Plan

In my next draft I am going to expand with even more research. My first draft seemed slightly limited in the sense of researched information. Also I am going to put more current trends in it. With a little more detail and more specific elpanations I believe I will have a great paper.

Revision Plans

After looking at my rough draft and deciding what to do to improve the revision of this project, the main thing that I will change for this essay will definitely be giving more specific details and citing sources that I take my information from. I feel after I do this the wikipedia revision will be easier to edit and make more sense when read. I am also going to doublecheck on citations and specificity the most with this assignment.

Revisions

I'm unsure about changes, considering I wasn't here, nor did I submit my rough draft electronically for critiquing. So as far as I'm concerned, I'll be talking to Elizabeth (and probably my neighbor, who just loves to have ideas bounced off of her) to figure out what my next moves will be entailing.

2nd response for Wed.

To revise my draft i think i just need to work on making sure my sources are cited right. it seems that is a big aspect of whether the post will stay up on wikipedia or not. I am also going to focus my entry a bit more with more detail into the field. Also the usual grammar aspect i will look over also.

Revision Plans

after reading your comments, I plan to go into a little more detail about certain parts of my post. I wrote the post assuming that the readers would know little details about the case. I plan to incorporate more information so that someone will be able to look at the post and understand it without any prior knowledge. I also need to format the headings that I include to look like other cases that are already posted.

Revision Plans

I plan to make the usual grammar and spelling revisions along with trying to put some more length into my essay. I have a lot of work to do on my essay and I'm hoping that I will be able to post it on Wikiapedia. I also need to work on the choice of wording that is used in the essay. since Wiki likes everything to be straight forward I need to revise my word choice.

Today's 2nd Response

I am still unsure of how I will revise my paper. The only thing I can say is I will try to make it more Wikipedia friendly. I think, for the most part, the essay is formatted correctly, I just have to make sure that it is more to the point like Wikipedia posts tend to be.

essay #4

After recieving feedback from you I have a few revision changes that I need to make in order for essay #4 to be complete. I need to work on the organization part alot in my essay and add my sources to it to back up my claims. I plan on revising it again this week, then hopefully get more feedback from you and turn it in wednesday for the final. Other than that, I just need to sit down and do it.

Response

This is for today's response for Mon. After looking at my page, I learned that it really focuses on examples of public relations but doesn't really go into extreme detail about exactly what it is.

Wednesday Response

After researching the wikipedia page on public speaking, I found that there was not very much that I could do to edit the "discussion" page. However the history and other sections had plenty of space that could have text added into it. Researching this and the other bibliography page I have was helpful in my decisions to edit those pages.

Revision Plans

After getting feedback from a peer and me, and looking at the discussion page on Wikipedia, summarize your plans for revision for your Essay #4.

--ejfleitz

the history

I didnt learn much in my history section on political discourse because there wasnt much there. I feel that I need to expand on the history on my cite. The discussion portion of my cite was more explanatiory, however, it can also be expanded.