Paris Hilton and Wikipedia

A good article on "Wikipedia" would have the majority of people having a good explanation on the history of a specific person and their events (whether if its good or bad) on the "Main Page". A good example would be about Paris Hiltons' unethical and illegal acts toward society through out the years. This type of page in "Wikipedia" could be a nice educational item, because it could be used to study Paris' Case and used in such courses as POLS 330 or LEGS 300. There is alot of "discussions" about the Paris Hiltons' case and what events needed to be changed and updated about the case. I believe that Wikipedia should include accurate timeline information and sections of serious events (whether if its beneficial or damaging to that particular person who you are researching). Both of these characteristics are important because if you were to hire or invest your assets in such people as Paris Hilton you would need to know the whole truth before you invest your time and money in Paris or her business plans that she has at that time.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Paris_Hilton

DISSENTING NOTE: One bad thing about Wikipedia that some college professors and k-12 teachers dislike this webiste is that people can change any post, anytime, and anywhere. This might lead to cases about defemation (libel about lying while writing, and slander about lying while giving presentations) in some situations due to wrong or malice posts on the website.

Response for Monday: Wikipedia

After doing the readings for Monday, go to http://www.wikipedia.org and choose a random entry. Explore the features provided on this entry page, especially look at the different tabbed sections ("main page," "discussion," "view source," "history," etc.). From this exploration, come up with two main characteristics that an effective Wikipedia entry would have. When you mention your characteristic, explain by providing an example (and don't forget to link from here to the entry you chose).

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Alex's essay

My initial reaction to this paper is good. It is well organized and gives a well rounded description of the public speaking discourse community. The strength’s I noticed were all of the resources used. It really helped to back your paper up when I saw a lot of research done. The research seemed credible too. The weakness noticed in the paper is length. It is long enough, but with more examples and issues discussed in your paper, with more research, your paper could really come around. I’m not suggesting more research to be done, but further in depth. Maybe discuss a few more issues or so. When reading the paper aloud, it sounded good. It wasn’t boring either. It held my attention. I am now more informed about this discourse community: public speaking.

Brandon Evaluation

Brandon had got a good start on his essay. His thesis was extremely clear. He emailed me the paper and I was able to evaluate it electronically and email him what I had thought. The rough draft was not finished but by the amount that was done I was able to see exactly where the paper was going and give him some constructive criticism. I suggested to him that he find and use some more sources to find some more information.

Kay's Display of Writing

Kay is off to a wonderful start, but she just needs to beef up her essay with some more research. Actually, I have some sources to email her to help with that. Other than that, she has a strong basis and good ideas to build off of. I know she was having some problems with finding sources for her research as much as I was, and I completely understand trying to build up from a weak foundation, but she is definately succeeding. We were confused on the format for quotes longer than 2 lines in MLA documentation. Is it single spaced and the margin indented 1/2 an inch? If anybody knows, PLEASE COMMENT! Thanks.

-Carly

Julie's Essay

I felt that the paper was a good start for this essay and was a good rough draft for the education community discourse. I feel that after some more research and organization, the essay will be ready to be finalized. I would probably format the paper differently and edit the organization than it will definitely be ready to be delivered. Nice job on this paper though.

Carly's Essay

I feel that Carly has a good start, i know she is having trouble finding really good research material but her paper is off to a great start with some concrete research about her discourse community. We got some good feedback from eachother she helped me figure out a couple more sources and things i could improve upon. I think she will have a strong essay on the discourse community she has chosen.

Chris-Eval

I evaluated Chris's essay and the big thing that I noticed was that he needs to reduce his introduction and focus more on the main topic of this essay. In that intro there needs to be a thesis to build on and to help stay on topic throughout the rest of the essay. In this essay it's important to discuss why your field is a discourse in the research that you have found and support it. Once you got past that, the sources that he has so far are good, just needs to build some more. I think that once he builds on his sources that he has his paper will take great shape.

Group Evaluation

I think that both of me and my group member did a great job evaluating my draft. I found out that we both had problems setting up our paper. My group member had focused more on the law than here career field, just like I focused more on my academic setup than my career field. We also had trouble finding sources for our project as well. We both think that we should have feedback from you immidiately before we move any further with our project.

Peer Workshop for Erin

Erin's paper was very well developed for a rough draft. She explored all the realms of language need to fully articulate the legal discourse community. The only things that need to be added are the sources for the different ideas presented. Also, she could throw in some real life examples of the legal language. This will grab the readers attention from the beginning

Peer Workshop

Joe had a great start on his paper. It was very interesting and got my attention right away. He definitely wrote the paper for someone who is not familiar with the discourse community. I suggested that he focus more on the specific aspects of the discourse community. Maybe offer suggestions as to what things someone would need to understand and learn to be a part of the legal community. He has a great start to his paper.

Michelle Chalupa Peer Evaluation

I think that Michelle has a good start on this assignment, but needs help in organizing her paragraphs. Possibly a more clear thesis will help with her organization process. Depending on the audience, she may want to define some of the terms within her career field of pharmaceutical sales so that general audiences not familiar with the terms can understand.

evaluation of essay

Cassie has really good ideas in her essay. She needs to have some clarity and organization to make it complete. She was creative with her ideas as well. I enjoyed reading her paper even thought like I said it needs some organization. Another thing that I notice is that she needs to complete citing her sources. Those were the only problems that I found with her essay, but overall she has a really good start.

DC Research

So far, my paper is far from complete but I have good feeling about it. I chose the legal community because it is the discourse that I would like to be a member of some day. A few problems I have confronted is finding adequate sources. I don’t know if I should quote lawyers, judges and politicians and explain the language they use, or what?

Self Eval.

I am not happy with my rough draft at all. I had a hard time finding good research materials. I was hoping to at least find somthing that could validate my ideas of Pharmaceutical Sales being a discourse community of 3 different genres: Science, Business, and Communication. I'm confused about my organization, and came to a point in my paper where I just went blank! I'm frustrated and stressed out, and lucky to have written what I do have written.

paper #3

I think that my paper needs a lot more work. I feel that since I had mush time that I didn't get to put 100% effort into it. Your comments always help me out so a lot of those I'm assuming will be needed!

Self Evaluation

I feel as though my paper is off to a good start, i feel like i need to intergrate my sources better, in to my paper and expand and make my draft a little. I had a hard time finding really good research materials because there is not much information on my career field yet. it is a newer type of discourse community. I am looking for some comments from people to make it better and how i could go deeper my discourse community better. I tried to give the rough draft as much effort as i could but i know there is a lot that can be fixed and made better.

Progress on Paper

I am happy with my paper. I decided to do the dance and dance education discourse community, which I think will be original because it is not a typical or popular area of study in college. As far as organization goes, I broke down the main media coverage and how dance education differs from other forms of education. I think I could use help on organization and the flow from paragraph to paragraph.

Self Evaluation 3

It took me a little bit of time to find out how I wanted to go about writing this paper on my area. But recently I think I have found my way. I am not far on my rough draft at all, but since I have discovered how I am going to write it my progress has definitely moved faster. Now I just need to collect more sources.

Progress

For my rough draft I only made it to about page three so I am not all the way done yet. I know what needs to be in there but I'm just having a hard time putting into words what I am trying to say. I think that over the next week I will be able to make a lot of improvements. I'm not really happy with it but I'm ready to recieve some feedback.

Essay #3

I think that my research paper was hard because no one and nothing that we did this week was really beneficial to my research. I know that most of the people in here did not match what I was going for in my career. I really liked my "law group" however law is only a small part in my career field. Luckly I found a couple of sources that hopefully helped me of getting a better idea of where I wanted to go in my life.

I feel that I need some professional help with understanding where I am at with this project, although I am open to read opinions if anyone has anything to say about my paper.
Even though, I feel that this paper is beneficial to my life its hard to really state where I want to go and be in a couple of years. I have a vivid imagination of where I want to go but I do not know the specific steps which will lead me to my goals.

Essay 3 IPC

My research so far in this career field has been successful and informative to me in the sense that I have found many useful and helpful sources that aid in my further investigation of my career field. My chosen career field is Interpersonal Communications and public speaking. As an aspiring public speaker, I value any help I can get and when it comes to finding sources whether electronic or reference, I appreciate sources that are going to be worth utilizing fot this essay. Up to this point I feel that I have been quite successful at making progress with my research.

Self Evaluation

So far I think my essay is going pretty good. I need to add a conclusion and proofread it, but I think I have a good start. I also need to add a few more sources to the paper, as I have a few ideas without sources as an example. I have not worked a lot on my annotated bibliography. have some sources, but have not summarized what they are about yet.

Self Evaluation

I feel that my rough draft is fairly intact. I found a lot of research on my career field, but wasn't fully sure if it would be the correct type of research needed. The acutal assignment is still slightly fuzzy, but I believe I have it under control. Hopefully the peer workshop will give me plenty of insight and help.