Chris-Eval

I evaluated Chris's essay and the big thing that I noticed was that he needs to reduce his introduction and focus more on the main topic of this essay. In that intro there needs to be a thesis to build on and to help stay on topic throughout the rest of the essay. In this essay it's important to discuss why your field is a discourse in the research that you have found and support it. Once you got past that, the sources that he has so far are good, just needs to build some more. I think that once he builds on his sources that he has his paper will take great shape.