Self-evaluation of draft

It took me some time to think of a good topic to write about. i am not the happiest with my draft right now, i think my draft needs a little bit more work. i had some problems coming up with some concluding ideas to my paragraphs and i want to expand a little more on the ideas i used in my body paragraphs. I like some of what i have right now but i feel as though it needs a bit more work.